一、求職信的第一段說明寫信的目的,有些專家認為不宜用分詞句子,比如用下面的句子做開頭,因為這樣的句子被人用得大多,顯得陳腐,失去特點。
replying to your advertisement...
answering your advertisement...
believing that there is an opportunity...
thinking that there is a vacancy in your company...
having read your ad...
再比較下面三組例句。每一組里面(1)句較差,經(jīng)過修改后(2)句顯得比較恰當(dāng)。
a:
(1) replying to your recent advertisement in the boston evening globe, i wish to apply for the position of sales manager.
(2) i am applying for the position of sales manager. i believe my qualifications will meet your exacting requirements.
b:
(1) i believe after reading your advertisement in this morning''s journal that you are offering just the opportunity i am looking for.
(2) your advertisement in this morning''s journal for an adjustment manager prompted me to apply for this position.
c:
(1) having read your advertisement in the new york times for an accountant, i thought you might be interested in my application.
(2) in your advertisement for an accountant, you indicated that you require the services of a competent person, with thorough training in the field of cost accounting. please consider me an applicant for the position. here are my reasons for believing i am qualified for this work.
二、在提到希望得到的待遇時,可用類似的句子:
i''d prefer not to set a salary, but since you ask, i consider 6,500 a month to be satisfactory.
it''s hard for me to say what my salary should be set at, but if pressed i would have to ask for a month as an initial salary.
i don''t feel that i should set my own salary, as i am happy enough to have the privilege of working for you. however, i would consider a month satisfactory compensation for my apprenticeship.
三、提起或要求待遇時不要過分謙虛或表示歉意,下列句子不宜使用:
as for salary, i do not know what to say. would $4,500 a month be too much?
do you think i would be asking too much if i said 5,000 dollars a month?
you know what my services are worth better than i do. all i want is a living wage.
四、關(guān)于求職信結(jié)尾怎么寫?下面也有三組例句。每一組里面(1)句較差,經(jīng)過修改后(2)句顯得比較恰當(dāng)。
a:
(1)軟弱、羞怯的: if you think i can fill the position after you have read my letter, i shall be glad to talk with you.
(2)改寫后(較佳): if my qualifications meet your standards, i would be happy to speak with you in person.
b:
(1)懷疑,不妥、不安全的: if you are interested, please let me know immediately, as i''m sure an interview will convince you i''m the man for the job.
(2)改寫后:i would like to request an interview. you can reach me by telephone at beijing 123456 between the hours of 7-9 a.m. and 5:30-9:30p.m. any evening.
c:
(1) 哀求式的句子,不夠完整(漏掉面談時間):i would appreciate the opportunity for an interview. i can be reached by calling beijing 12345678.
(2) 改寫后: may i have the opportunity to discuss this matter further with you? my telephone number is beijing 12345678. you can reach me between nine and five o''clock during the day.