雅思大作文七分要訣
導(dǎo)語：寫作7分是許多考生夢寐以求的分?jǐn)?shù)，但即使是一些外籍教師所撰寫的范文，在考官筆下也不過是7-8分!對于國內(nèi)大多數(shù)雅思考生而言，7分似乎是可望而不可及的。那么，究竟怎樣的文章，才能得到考官的青睞，最終幸運的得到7分的分?jǐn)?shù)呢?下面YJBYS小編分享雅思大作文七分要訣，歡迎參考!
一. Task response
1. 具體要求
Task response表示任務(wù)的完成。在官方給出的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中，7分有這樣的要求：
1. Address all parts of the task,
2. Present a clear position throughout the response,
3. Present, extend and support main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus.
�、倩卮鹆祟}目要求的所有問題。②整篇文章觀點鮮明。③詳細(xì)的解釋和論證了觀點。
2. 范例評析
▲ 劍橋雅思全真試題7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
1. 考生需要對題目中的兩個相反的觀點進(jìn)行分析，不能只分析自己傾向的觀點。即：固定不變的定罪制度有何作用;依據(jù)犯罪動機和環(huán)境靈活的定罪制度有何作用。
2. 考生需要非常清楚的表明自己的觀點，即回答應(yīng)當(dāng)如何對罪犯的犯罪行為定罪。
3. 考生對于題目中兩個相反觀點的分析需要擺出充足的論據(jù)，提出自己的理由并通過例子來證明。
7.5分考生范文選段：對固定不變的定罪制度的分析
On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. ‖Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. ‖This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. ‖If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.
1. 觀點：固定的懲罰制度對社會有威懾力。(fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society。)
2. 理由：考慮犯罪成本(reconsider committing crimes in the first place)
3. 擴展結(jié)果：有利于社會穩(wěn)定(lead to social stability and security through minimizing the number of crimes committed.)
4. 理由：如果沒有固定的定罪制度，會使犯罪分子更猖狂。(If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of , penal decisions would be largely arbitrary.)
5. 擴展結(jié)果：犯罪分子逍遙法外，不利于司法公正。(criminals getting away with their crimes and a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.)
3. 對策
�、購�(fù)習(xí)真題，找生詞
在考題中，經(jīng)常出現(xiàn)核心詞匯的重復(fù)，比如：distance learning, criminal等。雅思專家建議考生們可以在復(fù)習(xí)寫作時，先把近兩年的寫作題目過一遍，查查生詞。這樣做可以大大降低考生在作文題中遭遇生詞的尷尬，提高審題的準(zhǔn)確性。
�、谡莆詹煌}型大作文的寫作重點
觀點類：可以支持、反對、中立，一定要表達(dá)自己的觀點。論據(jù)要充分，舉例不可或缺。
分析解決類：所問即所答，重點分析原因，解決方法多角度。
�、郯舜笤掝}，重點突破
在考題中，“教育，科技，環(huán)保，全球化，政府，媒體，工作，社會生活”為�？嫉陌舜笤掝}。復(fù)習(xí)重點有以下幾方面：1. 每個話題的核心詞匯要爛熟于心。2. 每個話題要積累至少兩個可以作舉例論證的實例。3. 每個話題至少選擇兩道題目做brainstorming思路拓展練習(xí)。4. 每個話題要至少積累兩篇范文。5. 每個考生對自己不熟悉的話題，要加強以上練習(xí)。
二. Coherence and cohesion
1. 具體要求
Coherence and cohesion表示連貫統(tǒng)一。在官方給出的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中，7分有這樣的'要求：
1. Logically organizes information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout
2. Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under/over-use
3. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
�、傥恼陆Y(jié)構(gòu)富有邏輯性。②正確使用多種銜接方法。③每段話的中心思想明確。
2. 范例評析
劍橋雅思全真試題7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
7.5分考生范文選段：考生回答應(yīng)當(dāng)如何對罪犯的犯罪行為定罪。
In my opinion an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity. There have to be fixed punishment for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions. An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Competition Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through committing the crime. As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thieves stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger. Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment.
1. 中心思想：對于犯罪分子的定罪應(yīng)該有折中的方法，這才是保證公平公正的方法。(an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity.)
2. 段落結(jié)構(gòu)一分為二：
①固定下來定罪的底線和上線，舉例“競爭法”。
�、诙ㄗ镆忻庾锏奶厥馓幚怼Ｅe例“饑荒時偷食物的行為”和“正當(dāng)防衛(wèi)”。
3. 銜接的處理：文中加粗的部分(包含連接詞，代詞等)。
3. 對策
�、俅~
代詞包括人稱代詞，物主代詞和一些特定的詞語。代詞的使用能夠提高表達(dá)的統(tǒng)一性。
�、谕x詞，反義詞等意義相互關(guān)聯(lián)的詞
恰當(dāng)使用一些相關(guān)或相同概念的詞，能夠達(dá)到整篇文章自然擴展的效果。
③連接詞
連接詞是實現(xiàn)段落內(nèi)部表達(dá)連貫的最主要的手段。它能夠增進(jìn)句與句，或者段與段之間的邏輯關(guān)系。
三. Lexical resource
1. 具體要求
Lexical resource表示詞匯。在官方給出的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中，7分有這樣的要求：
1. Uses sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
2. Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
3. May produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
①靈活并且準(zhǔn)確使用各種詞匯。②正確搭配和使用不太普通的短語。
2. 范例評析
劍橋雅思全真試題7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
7.5分考生范文選段：固定不變的定罪制度和分情況靈活的定罪制度
On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.
On the other hand, taking the circumstance of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity. A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.
1. 詞匯的多樣使用：
�、僬J(rèn)為consider 重新考慮reconsider 思考consideration
�、趹土P(動詞)Punish 懲罰(名詞)punishment 懲罰的penal
�、鄯缸顲rime 罪犯criminal
2. 短語的多樣使用：
①服從be subject to
�、谂凶颾e convicted with
�、鄯缸颿ommit crimes
�、芘袥Q某人有某罪convince sb of sth
⑤方法the approach of
�、蘅紤]到take sth into consideration
⑦被指控be accused of
�、嗲疤醓 prerequisite for
⑨與某事相提并論be compared to
�、饫碛蓃eason for
3. 對策
�、兕}干核心詞與短語
“題干核心詞與短語”是指在每個話題的題目中，會有一些出現(xiàn)頻率比較高的名詞或短語。雅思議論文題目雖多，但是可以按話題分為八大類：教育，科技，環(huán)境與動物，媒體與廣告，政府，工作與生活，語言與文化，法律與犯罪。復(fù)習(xí)以雅思寫作機經(jīng)為主，關(guān)注近兩年的寫作題目。
②素材核心詞與短語
“素材核心詞與短語”主要是指某一類話題作文常會論證的角度，一般是由一些“實意詞”為主。雅思專家建議考生按照話題大量研讀范文的主題句或是支持句，去積累和總結(jié)。
四. Grammatical range and accuracy
1. 具體要求
Grammatical range and accuracy表示語法的準(zhǔn)確性和多樣性。在官方給出的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中，7分有這樣的要求：
1. Uses a variety of complex structures
2. Produces frequent error-free sentences
3. Has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
�、倌軌蚴褂酶鞣N復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)。②句子無語法錯誤。③能夠正確使用語法和標(biāo)點。
2. 范例評析
劍橋雅思全真試題7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
7.5分考生范文選段：
On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider committing this act in the first place. This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed. If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.
On the other hand, taking the circumstance of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity. A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.
1. 非謂語
①On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society.
�、赥his deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes committed.
�、跿his would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.
�、蹵 person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.
2. 虛擬語氣
①If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary.
�、赥his would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.
3. 對策
①避免常見語法錯誤
常見語法錯誤有：雙謂語;介詞搭配;并列結(jié)構(gòu)。
�、谌髲木�
熟練使用三大從句：名詞性從句，狀語從句，定語從句。
�、厶厥饩湫�
倒裝句，強調(diào)句，獨立主格，非謂語。
最后，雅思專家再次提醒考生：雅思作文閱卷考官全部是受過系統(tǒng)培訓(xùn)的native speaker, 具有豐富的批閱雅思作文的經(jīng)驗，他們對中國學(xué)生存在的問題有相當(dāng)全面的了解。因此，如果中國考生想要獲取作文7分，就必須根據(jù)自己的情況制定詳細(xì)的備考計劃并持之以恒。毋庸置疑，這終將是一場硬仗!